Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweighs the disadvantages?

In most countries, museums and
art
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
features
are the major entertainment
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
popularly visited. Some of these places may demand financial commitment before people are allowed entry, while some others allow for free access.
This
essay will discuss both the merits and the demerits of offering these services voluntarily to
people
Suggestion
the people
. To being, there many advantages to collecting
entry fee
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entry fees
the entry fee
from individuals that wish to see
art
or historical displays. One of them is that they generate revenue to run the establishment. In order words, they will be able to sustain the establishment without
need
Suggestion
the need
to source fund from external individuals. A
further
reason is
benefit
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beneficial
that they can
also
purchase a more quality historical or
artistic
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art
works available in the global market.
For instance
, the renowned International museum built in Abuja has grown in popularity
as a result
of the recent paintings they have purchased with the revenue generated over the years. In short, when visitors pay to see works of
art
and historical displays it provides funding to run the establishment better.
On the other hand
, monetizing entertainment
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
like the
art
galleries and museums will discourage patriotism and
also
make the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
prone to theft.
That is
to say, that many people who choose to entertain themselves with works of are because they have free access to them, but
then
if they are to be paid for only a few might want to visit
those
plural of "this"
these
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
.
In addition
,
such
commercialization may signal criminals on the value of the products and the money generated.
Thus
, making people pay for
this services
Suggestion
this service
these services
will be discouraging and
also
draw in the attention of criminals. In summary, both museums and
art
display houses as entertainment services may be established for financial gain or to make sufficient money to procure more artistic works, but
then
such
act may discourage people from visiting the places and
also
may attract criminals.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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