More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The number of people who have overweight are increasing along time in everywhere
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For
this
reason many counties try to find out solutions to attack
this
problem which is treating those live
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One of the suggested solution
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for
some people, is increasing the prices of fatty foods due to several reasons
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Firstly
, the main cause of
this
issue is consuming a large amount of junk foods
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therefor
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therefore
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when hike the prices of none healthy
foods especially
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foods, especially
that contain high level of fat and sugar
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they think a lot before buying
also
replace it
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with
multi kind of
food
which is might be
more healthy
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healthier
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addition
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if they buy the fatty
food
in high price and with bad taste some of them
giveup
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give up
to eat
this
king of
food
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On the other
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hand, there
are persons
disagree
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disagreeing
with increasing the prices as a solution of
overweight
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over weight
owing to they see the
food
addiction not related to a type of
food
eaten. But it
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depends
on the amounts
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The effective solution is to search
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for
overweighting
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such
as problems in body hormones of problems
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way of living
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Personally, I disagree with rising the prices of fast
food
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to
health but
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health, but
some people like to eat it even one time a week
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should be
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at
more reasonable prices specially for whom have limited income.
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conclusion, the overweight is
serious problem
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a serious problem
we should be more aware about the results and its effects on human bodies.
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coclusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, the overweight is
serious problem
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a serious problem
we should be more aware about the results and its effects on human bodies.

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