More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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The number of people who have overweight are increasing along time in everywhere

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For

this

reason many counties try to find out solutions to attack

this

problem which is treating those live

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One of the suggested solution

from

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for

some people, is increasing the prices of fatty foods due to several reasons

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Firstly

, the main cause of

this

issue is consuming a large amount of junk foods

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;

therefor

(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result

therefore

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when hike the prices of none healthy

foods especially

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foods, especially

that contain high level of fat and sugar

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they think a lot before buying

also

replace it

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with

multi kind of

food

which is might be

more healthy

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healthier

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addition

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if they buy the fatty

food

in high price and with bad taste some of them

giveup

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give up

to eat

this

king of

food

On the other

hand there

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hand, there

are persons

disagree

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disagreeing

with increasing the prices as a solution of

overweight

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over weight

owing to they see the

food

addiction not related to a type of

food

eaten. But it

is depends

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depends

on the amounts

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The effective solution is to search

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for

the reasons

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for

overweighting

all things

everything

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such

as problems in body hormones of problems

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way of living

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Personally, I disagree with rising the prices of fast

food

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although

, it is harm

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health but

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health, but

some people like to eat it even one time a week

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should be

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more reasonable prices specially for whom have limited income.

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conclusion, the overweight is

serious problem

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a serious problem

we should be more aware about the results and its effects on human bodies.

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coclusion

a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration

conclusion

, the overweight is

serious problem

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a serious problem

we should be more aware about the results and its effects on human bodies.

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obesity
overweight
fattening foods
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healthier food choices
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social implications
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nutritional education
public health campaigns
nanny state
individual's right
consumer behavior
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