Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do with me or disagree with this opinion.

It is universally accepted that
music
is the food to the soul
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,
however people
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however, people
are divided in their opinion as regards the acceptability of
music
amongst different culture in the
world
today
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in what ways does
music
binds the human race together?
this
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This
essay will
agrue
present reasons and arguments
argue
agree
the part played by
music
in the
world
today. Over the years
music
has become part of the
world
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evolves
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,
its knows no boundaries as it has no language barriers and can be accepted anywhere as long as
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
rhythm is accepted.In 2014 during a survey carried out the
havard
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Havard
school of
music
shows the hope to which
music
can give the human race
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a popular song written by Bob Marley was shared among commuters
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,
same song
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,
same time and same lyrics but 15 different cities around the
world
.With a universal camera on each zone and central viewing point they were asked to sing and the observers watched how
thier
of them or themselves
their
faces lit up and they were happy.
it
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It
goes to show how
music
has become accepted notwithstanding the culture or language. We live in an age where
music
has become a vital necessity in the healing processes of some ailment
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,
a mental home can never be complete without
music
playing around halls because it is generally believed that
music
soothes mental patients and sometimes jolts
memories therby
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memories, thereby
memories thereby
fastening the healing processes
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the elderly home
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the prisons even the church with
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
members from diverse backgrounds has keyed into the effect of
music
and the force in bringing people together
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
personally believe that
music
has an effective ways of bringing people together. To draw conclusion,I completely agree that
music
with it's own uniqueness of having no boundaries has over centuries bring folks together

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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