Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do with me or disagree with this opinion.

#people #music #cultures #ages

It is universally accepted that

music

is the food to the soul

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however people

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however, people

are divided in their opinion as regards the acceptability of

music

amongst different culture in the

world

today

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in what ways does

music

binds the human race together?

this

Suggestion

This

essay will

agrue

present reasons and arguments

argue

agree

the part played by

music

in the

world

today. Over the years

music

has become part of the

world

evolution

Suggestion

evolves

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its knows no boundaries as it has no language barriers and can be accepted anywhere as long as

it's

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

rhythm is accepted.In 2014 during a survey carried out the

havard

Suggestion

Havard

school of

music

shows the hope to which

music

can give the human race

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a popular song written by Bob Marley was shared among commuters

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same song

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same time and same lyrics but 15 different cities around the

world

.With a universal camera on each zone and central viewing point they were asked to sing and the observers watched how

thier

of them or themselves

their

faces lit up and they were happy.

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goes to show how

music

has become accepted notwithstanding the culture or language. We live in an age where

music

has become a vital necessity in the healing processes of some ailment

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a mental home can never be complete without

music

playing around halls because it is generally believed that

music

soothes mental patients and sometimes jolts

memories therby

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memories, thereby

memories thereby

fastening the healing processes

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the elderly home

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the prisons even the church with

it's

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

members from diverse backgrounds has keyed into the effect of

music

and the force in bringing people together

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refers to the speaker or writer

personally believe that

music

has an effective ways of bringing people together. To draw conclusion,I completely agree that

music

with it's own uniqueness of having no boundaries has over centuries bring folks together

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

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279 words

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
evoke
connect
diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
unifying force

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do with me or disagree with this opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?