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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The role of
history
 in our lives is increasingly becoming contentious in recent times. To some, there
is
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was
 no future in the past. For
others
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others, however
however
 it is an important ingredient of
knowledge especially
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knowledge, especially
 with respect to humanity. In my opinion, the value of
history
 depends on the
history
 itself.
History
 sometimes negatively affects the present and the future of a person or even a nation. In some countries,
History
 has been scrapped from the school curriculum because it has been seen as incendiary, inciting cold wars and even actual wars occasionally. The
history
 of Nigerian civil war in the years 1968 to 1971 is a good example of where
history
 can be harmful. It was found that youths in
south-eastern
situated in or oriented toward the southeast
southeastern
southwestern
 Nigeria felt terrible after they were taught the wickedness perpetrated against Biafrans by the
then
 northern Nigeria soldiers and militia in those days. There was growing hatred against the northerners, jeopardising national unity and peaceful coexistence.
As a result
history
 is no longer taught in Nigerian schools.
Conversely
,
History
 as a body of knowledge is beautiful to have and
also
 can help to determine the future positively. In some countries, it contributes to their wealth.
For instance
, museums, antiques and monumental structures are products of
history
, and they serve as the basis of tourism from which some countries make a lot of money.
In addition
, good
history
 as against a bad one can influence nations or individuals positively.
This
 is exemplified in Egypt. Egypt's
history
 as the cradle of ancient civilization has kept propelling them to the extent that in the contemporary world, they remain
atop
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a top
 global affairs. Presently, Egypt is
second
 to no country in Africa in development and civilization. To conclude, I believe that a good
history
 is invaluable, and should be transferred through generations, while a bad
history
 that incites wars and has other possible unwanted effects should be dropped. The beauty of a
history
 is in the
history
.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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