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Question: In order to alive traffic problems, government should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportlong. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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The solution of government imposing
tax
 on private car owners in order to make commercial transport better and
slove
find the solution to (a problem or question) or understand the meaning of
solve
slow
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 traffic problems is a hotly debated topic.
This
 essay will discuss both the benefits and drawbacks of
such
 measure with examples.
Firstly
, one of the
benefit
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benefits
 include
decongestion
 of the roads. Private vehicle owners will reduce irrelevant outings as they would not want to be taxed unnecessarily.
This
 will
therefore
 reduce traffic congestion.
For example
, when I visited my uncle in
UK
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the UK
, we travelled miles to purchase palm oil in a local store and he was taxed so much on the road and parking lot that he
subsequently
 refused to buy anything from stores far away with his vehicle. Another benefit would be improved quality of life as the commercial buses and trains will be repaired and
upgraded making
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upgraded, making
 more people want to use public transport to perform daily activities.
For instance
, there was a period when the government repaired trains making families to park their vehicle and travel
with
Suggestion
by
train thereby
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train, thereby
 reducing cost and saving up money to better their lives.
Nonetheless
, there are
draw backs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
 to
such
 a solution. There would be a heavy burden on car drivers. At present, the
tax
 is already high, so adding
further
tax
 would mean lesser income at the end of the month.
This
 type of
tax
 would affect the poor and average in the society and would leave the rich comfortably leading to
aggitatin
a mental state of extreme emotional disturbance
agitation
 and sadness. In conclusion,
such
 a solution is not entirely wrong, but there are advantages and disadvantages to the policy.
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