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Q. Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education
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 plays
vital role
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a vital role
 in everyone’s life, it is commonly believed by some people that, university
education
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 is very important in order to get appropriate job.
However
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, others think gaining work
experience
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 and development of skills is more important. In my opinion, both have their own positives and
negatives but
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negatives, but
education
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 is essential under any circumstances.
Majority
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The majority
 of people complete their graduation and masters from university to secure employment. Most of the MNC’s and mid-small scale industries hire new employees from universities and colleges.
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 to
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, it is feasible to understand and gain practical knowledge after
education
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. With proper
education
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 it is very easy to understand work while employed in
real world scenario
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real world scenarios
a real world scenario
. Why
education
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 is so important? We can understand by
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 example, people who are having adequate
experience
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 and skill set without
education
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 cannot promote on higher positions and not considered for bigger salaries because, market demands
education
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.
On the other hand
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, gaining
experience
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 and learning new skills is essential. It is so important to understand work which is only possible by gaining practical understanding and developing skill sets. Practical knowledge makes things easy to understand and enhances abilities which can be used in real time. Why some people believe that
experience
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 is important?
This
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 example will elaborate clearly;
everyday
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every day
 new challenges are taken on
chin
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the chin
 by project/industrial engineers. In order to face those situations and provide feasible solutions requires
experience
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 and skills. In conclusion, gaining proper
experience
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 and learning new skills is so important in real employment practices.
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, without
education
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 there is less individual growth in terms of self-development and career,
experience
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 can be gained after completing college or university
education
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.
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