In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

There is a speculation going around that, some of the countries impose very strict rules of behaviour on children.
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Whereas
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,
majority
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the majority
of nations allow
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
to do almost anything they want.
This
essay explains about, to what extent should
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
have to follow rules. Current generation kids are more talented as, they are exposed to all the advanced technology.
This
makes them
to behave
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behave
more rude and disobedient to their elders.
Also
over exposure to the technology leads many kids to danger.
For example
, Nowadays, we could see there are several
number
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numbers
of social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
mediums
, which makes young female children to land into the trouble. To avoid all these issues, certain government imposes
ban on all the
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the ban on all
social media across their country. Countries like Saudi, Muscat and most of the middle east countries imposes strict rules on the behaviour of the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
. Rules
such
as not talking to the unknown person etc. And there are several rules
imposed particulary
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imposed, particularly
imposed particularly
for the female children. In recent times, most of the UAE countries imposed the ban
of
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on
using social networks for the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
in order to
safegaurd
make safe
safeguard
them from various issues. As a conclusion, we can agree that imposing very strict rules of behaviour upon
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
will safeguard them from any danger. But at the same time, so many rules like
said
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saying
to say
in the above paragraphs will make
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
to lose interest in their life.
Also
, they will become incapable to lead
independent life
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independent lives
an independent life
. Children should take up some of the advices which are really needed, from their elder people and act
accordingly
to make sure they don't end up in any trouble.
Submitted by ergbalachandar on

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