In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

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There is a speculation going around that, some of the countries impose very strict rules of behaviour on children.

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majority

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the majority

of nations allow

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

to do almost anything they want.

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essay explains about, to what extent should

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

have to follow rules. Current generation kids are more talented as, they are exposed to all the advanced technology.

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makes them

to behave

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behave

more rude and disobedient to their elders.

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over exposure to the technology leads many kids to danger.

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, Nowadays, we could see there are several

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numbers

of social

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a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information

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mediums

, which makes young female children to land into the trouble. To avoid all these issues, certain government imposes

ban on all the

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the ban on all

social media across their country. Countries like Saudi, Muscat and most of the middle east countries imposes strict rules on the behaviour of the

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

. Rules

such

as not talking to the unknown person etc. And there are several rules

imposed particulary

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imposed, particularly

imposed particularly

for the female children. In recent times, most of the UAE countries imposed the ban

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using social networks for the

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

in order to

safegaurd

make safe

safeguard

them from various issues. As a conclusion, we can agree that imposing very strict rules of behaviour upon

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

will safeguard them from any danger. But at the same time, so many rules like

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saying

to say

in the above paragraphs will make

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

to lose interest in their life.

Also

, they will become incapable to lead

independent life

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independent lives

an independent life

. Children should take up some of the advices which are really needed, from their elder people and act

accordingly

to make sure they don't end up in any trouble.

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In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in -What are the reasons for this? -How can people research this?

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some say that these are the best people to talk to school students about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Computers these days can translate all kinds of language with great accuracy. Hence, our children will not need to learn more languages in the future. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?