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Scientists believe that in order to protect the environment, people must use less energy in their daily lives. However, most people have not changed the way they live. Why do you think many people have not taken individual action? What could be done to encourage them to take action?

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Pollution is a serious problem in a whole world, all countries try to try to solve it through individuals or even
goverements
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
.Scientists say the main
first
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 step to protect the environment is
people
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the people
, they must use less
energy
Use synonyms
, but unfortunately a lot of them not change the way of their
live
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life
lives
 to solve
this
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 issue. In
this
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 essay, we will talk about the reasons which are
avoid
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avoiding
 people to not take individual action? And the methods
can applied
Suggestion
can apply
 to foster them to take the action.
Firstly
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, the irresponsibility of some people specially who are rich. They think only about themselves when they buy the latest car model without any concern the amount of fuel required as well as
amount
Suggestion
the amount
 of emissions in the air.
Consequently
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, invitation new models of cars that using small
energy
Use synonyms
 with high efficiency
.
Accept space
.
To illustrate that, Tesla Company
lunched
set up or found
launched
 new cares totally electric and hybrid with
distinctive shape
Suggestion
a distinctive shape
distinctive shapes
, use both electricity and fuel which are clean
energy
Use synonyms
. And may be available
in
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at
 a reasonable
prices
Suggestion
price
 in near future.
Secondly
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, many people buy electronic devices and home appliances without reading how much
energy
Use synonyms
 consumed which presented by stars
.
Accept space
.
If
the number
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the amount
 of stares increase;
for example
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 4 of 5 rations or 5of 5 it is g effective
of
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to
 reduce the
energy
Use synonyms
.
Therefore
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, spread awareness using TV advertisements and campaigns in universities and schools and public areas to encourage them to buy
devices less
Suggestion
devices with less
 power consumption. To conclude,
every one
all people
everyone
 responsible to how keep the environment
also
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 by cooperation between ourselves to make our life clean for ourselves and for
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next generations
Suggestion
the next generations
.
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