Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Does
exercise
can prevent working people from having health problems? Recent research indicates that the lack of exercising is bringing about many health problems in workers and to overcome
this
problem many strategies that are
mentionated
make reference to
mentioned
below are required.
Firstly
, it is clear-cut that regardless its profession just few people who
work practice
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work, practice
some kind of
sport
or activity and
unsurprisingly most
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unsurprisingly, most
of these people have been practicing their
sport
activity since they were
teenagers so,
Suggestion
teenagers, so
the important habit of exercising sparkled off when they were teenagers or even more when they were a child.
Secondly
, workers often say that they do not practice any
sport
activity due to the fact that they do not have enough time, it is often said by workers that scarcely have they left the office or their place when they want to go home to rest or to see their family.
To begin
to tackle
this
situation it
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situation, it
is vitally important that schools, companies and
governmets
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
started to encourage both children and workers to do some some kind of
exercise
. Schools can start building the habit of
exercise
,
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,
companies can encourage their employees giving them discounts in gyms or promoting obligatory
sport
activities at the
compay
an institution created to conduct business
company
facilities and
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
must offer free
sport
acitvities
any specific behavior
activities
in order to
ecourage
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
self-
employee
Suggestion
employed
people.
Although
,
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,
this
matter entails a lot of
work
and time is highly necessary to start now
otherwise
more people will be unhealthy and
consequently
they will not have a good quality of life because because nowadays most illness are related to heart attacks and diabetes which are diseases that require a lot of attention and unfortunately are costly. It is clear cut that
to begin
to tackle
this
situation companies and governments must
work
together in order to encourage people to practice some
sport
Suggestion
sport, although
although
,
this
matter entails a lot of
work
it will have a
possitive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
impact on people's health.
For example
, companies can provide their employees half-hour each day of
exercise
with some instructor provided by the company To sum up, companies, councils must encourage people to
do
engage in
make
exercise
more often
throught
all the way through
throughout
through
thought
some athletic games
,
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,
activities that require physical.
Submitted by Serhio Baraniuk on

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