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News plays an important part of most people's lives. Why is news important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news?

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With the increase in
population
, industrialization and
construction
 are
also
 increasing rapidly, resulting in polluting
water
 and
air
. Extreme measures should be taken quickly to stop
this
.
Water
 and
air
 are two main resources for life on planet Earth, but due to increasing industrialization and
construction
, their quality is degrading. Industries are polluting the resources on a major level. They release all the toxic products in the
air
 as well as in
water
. Rivers and ponds that were previously used by the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 villages for
water
 resource, no longer provides clean and fresh
water
.
This
 is not the only cause, constructing big factories and societies requires huge amount of
water
 usage,
also
 some societies are now-a-days getting built near
water
 sources, that they advertise saying scenic beauty.
This
 is resulting in more
water
 pollution as both concrete and society waste gets dumped into the
water
. The most important measure that we need to take is to decrease the
population
. As
population
 is the main cause of pollution on
this
 planet. Less
population
 will lead to less
construction
. The
second
 measure that could be implemented instantaneously is for the industries to be built outside of cities and there should be regular checks on the industry to ensure that they are not polluting the environment.
Also
,
construction
 sites should be properly examined by Government officials so that there is no waste going near any
water
 resource and the
water
that is
 getting used for the
construction
 site is not wasted in any way. In conclusion, some smart measures should be taken by the Government as well as the industrialists and builders, so that we are not polluting
air
Suggestion
the air
 and
water
 for our selfish needs.
Submitted by gangane.ankur on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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