a person' worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. old fashioned values such as honour, kindness and trust no longer seem important/ do u agree or disagree ?

people
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People
nowadays have contrasting views about how to assess an individual's
value
. Despite the fact that a lot of people think ranking status, property are essential and other factors are minor, I would say that loyalty, honesty and prestige still play an important role. Social status and material possessions could be seen that those elements are
common way
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a common way
to judge people.
This
is because we are living in the modern lives which makes many of us chasing to enrich and take potential benefits from others. In fact, qualifications and property are consequences of hard working which many people want to prove to outside. To be more clear, many people seem not much useful for society as well as others because they do not obtain even some normal requirements.
Additionally
,,
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,
it is really easy to assess others with their background
instead
of finding their personality. Generally speaking, modern relationships these days might be
less
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less valuable
value
if we compare with those in the past.
For example
, in the past our previous generations
have
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had
very tight perspective because they spent a lot of time to talk and share information about daily lives.
however
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However
, at the present, we might overlook it and focus too much on working or studying.
In contrast
, honour, kindness and trust are still incredibly crucial to look into a person. In many cases, those factors are
stonemark
for many people in order to know a person's
value
because
spirit
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spiritual
worth is still respected in many cultures. Take japan's population as an example, they have reputation all around the world because of their kindness and trust. Not
individuals but
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individuals, but
also
their society are admired from outside
that is
because those characters.
Furthermore
, those elements are vital
contribution
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contributors
to gain respect from others. In conclusion, there is no doubt about that material possessions or degrees could supply a good view about someone,
however
, it is not all we need, loyalty and kindness
are still play
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still play
are still playing
have still played
an integral role to estimate the
value
of a person.
Submitted by Serhio Baraniuk on

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