The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie
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shows a survey of Britain visitors which are
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by types of facilities in the year 1999. A glance at the
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reveals that
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visitors
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visitor
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choosed
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two main
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places
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theme
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parks
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and
museums
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and
gallaries
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galleries
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especially
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separated
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subgroups ;
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pleasure beach, Alton Towers, Pleasureland, Southport, Chessington World of Adventures and
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Legoland
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,Windsor. It is clear from the data , Wild
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and zoos did not
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preferred
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,
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hold
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of graphs.
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Parks
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most prefered places in
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, there was
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more
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than
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museums
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. The
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covered roughly as equal as
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theme
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park
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parks
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,
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could not hold
graph
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more than
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park
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parks
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the historic house moderate visitors by 16
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. The
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park
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divided
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5
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subgroups
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graph
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. the vast majority of
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visitor
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visitors
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passed time in
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pleassure
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pleasure
beach.
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number of
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visitor
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choosed
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legoland
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by 10%. in conclusion,
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park
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parks
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and
museums
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and
galleries
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the
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most visited places.
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otherwise
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theme
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park
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divided subgroups,
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and
galleries
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could be the most visited facility in
britain
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, visitor, theme, parks, museums, galleries, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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