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As countries have developed, there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes. Why does this happen? How does this affect society?

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Nowadays, smaller family sizes
have been gaining
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are gaining
have gained
 popularity in developed countries. There are several reasons why
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society
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. Due to the good social security system, people do not need to afraid whether their children will take care of them when they in old ages. In
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 day and age, governments invest an enormous amount of money in the social security system which provides protection for most people.
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, the elderly are able to get pension monthly from governments and the companies they have served before retirement. Another reason is that bringing up a child is costly. Parents need to take good care of them in every aspect of life,
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 as sending them to a good school, providing a good quality of life, and meeting their daily demands.
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trend impact
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trend, impact
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 in many ways. One positive effect is that the population would fall resulting in less poverty in
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 as there is less competition for scarce resources. Parents can provide a better education for their children and people have more opportunities to choose what career they want to pursue. One negative impact maybe there
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 less young people in the workforce in the future which do harm to economic growth and future prosperity. In conclusion, due to the perfect social security system and higher costs
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 raising children, people prefer to have smaller family sizes and
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 has both positive and negative impacts on
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. Regardless of any impacts,
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 trend gets more and more popular as many countries are developing and become wealthier.
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