Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that different forms of arts should be treated as
importantly
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important
as other subjects at school.
This
essay agrees that concentration
on
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of
arts is important for the overall development of a child because it gives them an outlet to express themselves, and
secondly
it makes a viable
career
option in the future as well.
To begin
with, learning some form of art enables children to share their feelings with other people. Often young kids find it difficult to communicate with their parents and other adults, due of which they tend
become
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to become
introverts
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introverted
and find it hard to share their feelings. Infusing their thoughts into any form of art gives them a platform to express their views, and at the same time help in reducing their anxiety and stress.
For example
, many famous songwriters stated that writing their feelings in lyrics helped them recover from any bad memories. Not many students can learn traditional subjects
such
as math, science and other languages. For these children, learning some form of art can prove to be very beneficial and make a viable
career
out of it.
For example
, David lynch, a famous actor, could not complete primary school and in spite of that achieved great success in his film
career
. In conclusion, painting, dancing and acting should be given equal importance in primary schools because it helps the children in communicating with adults, and
also
become a viable
career
option for them. It is recommended that all schools make these subjects mandatory, since it will assist in the overall development of an individual.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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