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Nowadays, young people communicate with friends and family mostly through social networking sites, rather than other ways of communication like talking on the phone or face to face. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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These days, the young part of the population prefer to keep in
touch
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 with their parents or acquaintances through social media sites rather than having a conversation on the phone or
face
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 to
face
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. It is my point of view that
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 is a positive development because it saves
time
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 and people are protecting their health.
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 of all, nowadays, networking is a handful, modern and everyone has access to it. Due to the fact that, around the world, almost every individual has an internet connection,
facebook
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Facebook
 account or mail is very likely to get in
touch
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 with that person very fast.
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,
people regularly are
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people are regularly
 checking their social. In the past people used to meet
face
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 to
face
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 and discuss problems.
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 fact has its own advantages
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 as seeing a person’s body language, but at the same
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, it is
time
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 and money
consumer
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consuming
. Sometimes, seeing a person may require
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 abroad which require
time
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 and money to transport tickets. My father is a good example of
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. He had been living abroad since 2000. In the beginning, it was very hard for him because social media did not exist and
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 at home required many hours of driving. Since he opened a social media it is very easy to keep in
touch
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 with us.
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, talking on the phone can affect our health and safety. It is well known that these devices emit radiations which have a band impact on our body. Gamma and beta radiation are
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 to produce different types of
cancer which
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cancer, which
 can affect the ears or the brain. Recent researches have shown that phone usage has dramatically increased the number of those
diagnosticated
converted or adapted to domestic use
domesticated
 with brain cancer. In conclusion, I believe that keeping in
touch
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 with our families through social media is a positive development because it saves
time
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 and it helps us maintaining our health.
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