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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that all citizens in a nation should enjoy free medical
treatment
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this
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 may not include new forms of technological advancements in medicine due to the high cost of these services. I completely agree with
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 view as most of the population usually need basic
health
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 services while the other who require the newest form of
health
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treatment
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 can
incure
make oneself subject to; bring upon oneself; become liable to
incur
 the charges for
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 services.
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, every
individual whether
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individual, whether
 affluent or impoverished should benefit from a free
health
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 care policy in their nation irrespective of their age, race or social status.
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 not only helps to reduce morbidity and mortality rate in the
country but
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country, but
also
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 afford everyone the opportunity to enjoy the basic
health
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 services
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 as antenatal, immunization, prevention and
treatment
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 of malaria and other basic medical services.
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, some advanced form of laboratory investigations and costly
treatment
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 options ranging from
cryotherapy
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,
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,
to chemotherapy and even
surgery which
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surgery, which
 are required for
critical disease condition
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critical disease conditions
a critical disease condition
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 as cancer can be paid for by individuals requiring
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 services.
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 newer
forms
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form
 of
treatment
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 options can mount unnecessary pressure on the state purse if the patients do not pay for them.
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, the national
health
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 insurance scheme which was introduced to Nigeria in the year 2000 has reduced morbidity and mortality rate in Nigeria by as much as fifty percent from its introduction till date according to a WHO report
in
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on
 November 2011 despite the fact that the scheme does not cover all cost of
health
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 care but all basic
health
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 services are included in the package. To conclude, the effect of free medical services to all individuals in the society cannot be overemphasized as life expectancy is
increased
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increasing
 and it
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 helps to promote overall wellbeing through reduction in
number
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the number
 of deaths and illnesses.
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