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Happiness is considered very important in life why it is difficult to define? Are important in achieving happiness?

#happiness #life
Whilst, there is no doubt that
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of people would like to be happy in their lives.
however
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However
, the personal nature of
happiness
 makes difficult to describe. Some needs that we all share with regard to achieving or experiencing
happiness
. I will discuss about
this
 in the following paragraphs. To embark with, there are myriad reasons why I am claiming that
happiness
 is very important for everyone. The
first
 and an important reason is that,
happiness
 is difficult to describe because everyone has different means of
happiness
.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
, nobody can fully understand or experience another person's feelings, and we all have our own particular passion. We take
interest according
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interest, according
 their choice from which we take pleasure.
Furthermore
, some people,
for instance
, satisfied Sunday
on
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with
 huge amount of money, whereas
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 give importance to their health and family.
In addition
, a range of other feelings, from excitement two peacefulness. Contrary above the statement, it seems almost impossible to give
definition
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a definition
definitions
.
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.
 Many individuals would agree that there are some basic preconditions achieving. In
additionally
,
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,
 hard for a person to be happy if he or she does not have a safe live and enough food to eat. As well as our basic survival needs are predominant for peaceful life
.
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.
Also
, the greatest Joy movement when we share your experience with family and friends. In the conclusion,
happiness
 is difficult to define because it is a particular to each human
however
, I believe that our basic needs are much important for
survival
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surviving
 life.
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