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Nowadays parents put too much of pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?

Parenting is a critical
course when
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course, when
 comes to their overall progress of children in terms of an
education
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, career and settlement, etc. Due to
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 phenomenon parents are imposing a lot of pressure in order to achieve the maximum possible success in their life. In my opinion, with
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 progression of imposing un-necessary things on kid’s only drawbacks comes
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with
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a plate
 as results.
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 with, the majority parents want to keep their children ahead of
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the package
,
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 as the
education
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, career and an overall success in settlement. In order to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their concerns, they used to impose a tremendous pressure on kids about an
education
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 to get
the good
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better
 marks and a proper job etc.
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, a survey conducted by the Unicef Inc.
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 2015 in relation to “Causes of Stress in Children”, and
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the results
 were extremely shocking. In most of the similar cases, around 2/3 times the parents are completely responsible for stress in children which result in poor all in all progress of a child.
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 issue need to be noted which is too severe as, kids commit suicide due to
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the unbearable burden
 by guardians. They are pushed to their limits to give their best in the life.
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, a continuation of a same survey Unicef Inc.
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Illustrate
 one more downside of
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 issue called “Mental Illness” and the reasons were same as above. In conclusion, by imposing extreme burden on children will only affect them in terms of
education
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, mental health, difficulty in relations with parents and career etc. In my opinion, with
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 strategy parents will get
only adverse effect
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the only adverse effect
 on their children.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Excessive pressure
  • Academic achievements
  • Professional success
  • Secure future
  • Social comparison
  • Competitive environment
  • Psychological impact
  • Stress and anxiety
  • Resilience
  • Work ethic
  • Emotional well-being
  • Supportive parenting
  • Achievements
  • Life skills
  • Balance
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