Nowadays parents put too much of pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?

Parenting is a critical
course when
Accept comma addition
course, when
comes to their overall progress of children in terms of an
education
, career and settlement, etc. Due to
this
phenomenon parents are imposing a lot of pressure in order to achieve the maximum possible success in their life. In my opinion, with
this
progression of imposing un-necessary things on kid’s only drawbacks comes
in
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with
plate
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a plate
as results.
To begin
with, the majority parents want to keep their children ahead of
package
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the package
,
such
as the
education
, career and an overall success in settlement. In order to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their concerns, they used to impose a tremendous pressure on kids about an
education
to get
the good
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better
marks and a proper job etc.
For example
, a survey conducted by the Unicef Inc.
in
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In
2015 in relation to “Causes of Stress in Children”, and
results
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the results
were extremely shocking. In most of the similar cases, around 2/3 times the parents are completely responsible for stress in children which result in poor all in all progress of a child.
In addition
to
this
, another aspect of
this
issue need to be noted which is too severe as, kids commit suicide due to
unbearable burden
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the unbearable burden
by guardians. They are pushed to their limits to give their best in the life.
For instance
, a continuation of a same survey Unicef Inc.
illustrate
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Illustrate
one more downside of
this
issue called “Mental Illness” and the reasons were same as above. In conclusion, by imposing extreme burden on children will only affect them in terms of
education
, mental health, difficulty in relations with parents and career etc. In my opinion, with
this
strategy parents will get
only adverse effect
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the only adverse effect
on their children.
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  • Excessive pressure
  • Academic achievements
  • Professional success
  • Secure future
  • Social comparison
  • Competitive environment
  • Psychological impact
  • Stress and anxiety
  • Resilience
  • Work ethic
  • Emotional well-being
  • Supportive parenting
  • Achievements
  • Life skills
  • Balance
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