he average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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The average standard of people's
health
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is likely to be lower In future, the average standard of well-being of people is expected to be worsened than
present
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the present
. I absolutely disagree with the statement, because advancement in medical sciences and increased
education level lead
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the education level lead
to cure and prevention respectively.
Firstly
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, progression in
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health sciences
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the health sciences
has controlled the morbidity and mortality by many folds. Compared to past, when even small
disease
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caused prolonged illness or death, nowadays every
disease
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can be cured.
This
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is because of evidence based research and contemporary practices in surgery and medical treatment. The research and development in medical will enhance
further
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, and patients will be treated with much more ease without any significant side effects.
For example
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, the drug used in chemotherapy for cancer patients has less side effects as compared to past and patients become healthy without compromising their hairs and immune system.
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, big diseases are being cured with much more ease as compared to
past
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the past
and in
future
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the future
the situation will become better.
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Secondarily
, the general
awareness
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and education about the cause and spread of diseases is being enhanced day by day. Due to
awareness
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campaigns, advancement in technology print and social media, people now are much aware about prevention from diseases. As a
results
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result
, population care about their hygiene and surroundings due to which
disease
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did not
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the income or profit arising from such transactions as the sale of land or other property
took
place
at
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in
the
first
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place and
also
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do not spread if it occurs.
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, In Pakistan, parents were reluctant to let their children take polio drops, but due to
awareness
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on Television, the number of parents taking their children for polio drops
has increased
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have increased
by leaps and bounds.
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, in coming years more and more people will know about different diseases, which will prevent any
disease
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to occur and spread. To conclude, the consideration that general
health
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indicators will get
worsen
(comparative of 'bad') inferior to another in quality or condition or desirability
worse
in
future
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the future
does not hold significance.
This
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essay discussed that because of an increased
awareness
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about the diseases among
masses
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the masses
and research in
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health sciences
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the health sciences
has led to
stoppage
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the stoppage
of
disease
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to occur at
first
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place and make its treatment much
easy
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easier
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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