In many nations more and more shops are open for long hours. Is this a positive or negative development for the shoppers and local community.'

Recently, there
is
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has been
an increase in the number of shopping malls opened for a long period of
time
in many countries. In my opinion, it has pro's and con's on both the buyers and the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
in equal measure. The increased number of shopping hours promotes convenience for the shoppers and more job opportunities in the local
community
. People can purchase items at any
time
that is
feasible for them which helps them to keep up with the hectic work
schedule everyone
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schedule as everyone
faces in today's era.
For example
, a student who
also
works may need to visit the mall at odd hours due to
time
constraint. More so, shop owners will require more labour to cope with these long hours thereby promoting employment. These jobs which are usually done in shifts are flexible and enables people to have more than one job or even work while studying.
Thus
,
this
trend becomes a positive development to the shoppers and local
community
alike.
However
, the high criminal risk to the shoppers and increased financial burden to the local
community
are the drawbacks.
Firstly
, shopping especially at odd hours poses danger on the shoppers due to exposure to robbery attacks, kidnapping and other forms of vices. To elucidate, the Nigerian police department in 2018 has warned that the increased number of hours shops are opened has concurrently led crime rate to 70% as against the 20% seen in 2017.
Furthermore
,
Accept space
,
financial burden
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the financial burden
is placed
on
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in
the local
community
due to services
such
as security and traffic regulation which must be maintained to cope with long operational hours in shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
. The above makes it a negative development. To conclude, the increase in shopping
hours which
Accept comma addition
hours, which
promotes convenience and employment
also
at the same
time
increases crime rate and financial burden on both the shoppers and
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
on
equal scale
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an equal scale
.
Therefore
, it is essential for nations to weigh both sides before imbibing it into their society
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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