You recently bought a new computer for your job in the office. There is a problem with the internet connection to your computer. Write a letter to the IT support manager. In your letter: · Explain the details of your computer · Describe the problem that you have · Ask for help to solve this problem

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Hello sir/madam, I hope

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letter finds you well. I am writing

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letter to ask for help regarding

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the internet connection to my new computer. My name is Shereen. Tam

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research scientist in the chemistry department. I bought a new computer for my job here

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the company. It is the latest HP model with the model number 5738. I tried several times to connect The internet to

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device.

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, I could not do it.

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, I asked for help from one of my colleagues but neither one of us

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able to connect it.

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, I asked one of the IT support workers. They advised me to have a specific password in order to connect the internet to any new computer. They

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mentioned that the IT support manager

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the only person who could provide me with

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password

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the company's rules.

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, I would kindly ask for the password, please. I hope to hear from you as soon as possible and thank you for all the support you provide. Yours sincerely, Shereen

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Coherence and Cohesion

Consider using transitional phrases to enhance flow between sentences and paragraphs.

Task Response

Make sure to provide more specific details or steps you have taken to resolve the issue to enhance task response.

Coherence and Cohesion

The letter is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

Task Response

The writing tone is polite and appropriate for a formal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

181 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Intermittent connection
Operational efficiency
Networking cables
Wireless fidelity (Wi-Fi)
Technical specifications
Remote assistance
Troubleshooting steps
Configuration settings
Latency issues
Bandwidth
Technical support
Network adapter
ISP (Internet Service Provider)
Hardware/software compatibility
Diagnostics test
Urgency
Connectivity
Data transfer rate

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