Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have a health problem as a result. Why to many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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Of late, reports are suggesting that, obesity and other

health

issues have been

increased

Suggestion

increasing

at a rapid speed in working professionals especially in white

colored

a band that fits around the neck and is usually folded over

collared

employees. The main reason behind

this

is, they do not get adequate workouts and do not spend enough time to do so. I shall discuss my views on

this

essay.

First

and foremost, employees do spend

good amount

Suggestion

a good amount

of time to complete their task and few might even take longer periods to finish the work, which has been assigned to them. And in non-working hours they would like to spend their time

Suggestion

what they desire.

For example

, enjoying with either families or friends or by doing their passionate works.

Secondly

, few professionals may think that they reached to the level what they wanted to be and

as a result

this

they stop doing the workouts. To overcome

this issues

Suggestion

this issue

these issues

, both employers and employees should take necessary actions.

First

, employers had to install gym and other workout equipment’s in the work environment.

Second

, employers should

also

setup awareness campaigns and they should explain the

health

benefits of doing exercise.

Employees

Suggestion

The employees

, have to monitor their body mass index at regular intervals and if there are any changes in their

body

Accept comma addition

body, then

then

they should immediately consider to start either running or any other workout activities. They could even

start playing few

Suggestion

start playing a few

start playing little

start playing little little

games like badminton, tennis or any outdoor games.

This

would reduce the fat content in the body. Being healthy should be the highest priority to any one, after all

health

is wealth. To overcome the

health

hazards in working

professionals both

Accept comma addition

professionals, both

employers and employees should work hand in hand.

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

276 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Time constraints
Sedentary lifestyle
Passive leisure activities
Workplace wellness programs
Active commuting
Subsidized
Public awareness
Health benefits
Incentivizing
Accessible public spaces

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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have a health problem as a result. Why to many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

"Old people are an essential part of society, so they should be respected.” How much do you agree with this opinion and why? Give reasons and examples to support your answer

Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

An increasing number of larger shopping areas, malls and department stores are leading to the decline of smaller corner shops. what are the advantages and disadvantages of shopping in larger shopping centers rather than smaller, more traditional shops?

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?