Science will soon make people live up to 100 years or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Aging in recent years has become very debatable. Many individuals share the view that new scientific innovations will enable humans
live
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to live
up to about 100 to 200 years on earth, making
this
beneficial because,
this
will enable them live longer with their family members,
however
, I strongly disagree with
this
view
because,
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, because this would
this
would not only increase the world’ population but
also
increase environmental pollution.
This
essay will discuss both views
in
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at
length. The major reason why individuals share the opinion that living more years on earth is beneficial is because,
this
allows longer time with
ones
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one
one's
family.
In other words
, the longer humans stay in the world the closer they are to their families. Imagine if you will,
this
present generation living for more than 10 decades, knowing more than 4 to 5 generations, becoming great great grandparents.
Thus
, resulting in a community of extended families.
On the contrary
, many believe that
this
is unrealistic mainly because,
this
would increase population, which in turn increases environmental pollution.
This
implies that, more citizens will be subjected to the effects of overcrowding
such as, spread
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, such as spread
of airborne diseases. Take
for example
, the spread of tuberculosis in 1940, in South America, which took about 300,000 lives. According to Dr Shama Atake, the historian, the spread of
this
disease was
as a result
of overcrowding.
Hence
, innovations to increase life cycle would result in severe environmental damage. In conclusion, scientific developments
would rather
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would, rather
than, benefit the community, cause more damage to not only the
society but
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society, but
also
the health of the citizens within the society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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