Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Most of citizens consider how did governments allot public money. Some people argued that taxes
should be spend
should spend
on promoting a healthy lifestyle than spend it on the medical treatment. From my point of view, I totally agree that governments should focus on preventing illness. For a variety of reasons,
argument will be
that prevention is better than cure, and already ill people
are expected
were expected
to be at their
the administration
should raise awareness about healthy lifestyle to prevent illness effectively. Nowadays, many common diseases
as obesity, blood sugar, heart disease are leading to an unhealthy lifestyle. These health problems can be prevented by diet foods, doing physical activities regularly, etc.
For instance
, Vietnamese adults have started eating vegetable, organic food and drinking
milk to improve their quality’s life.
, governments can save a lot of money and effort when they invest in preventing medical problems. They could build
more central
most central
parks to encourage citizens on doing
the exercises
In addition
Accept space
celebrate some healthy events like The Running day, 30days challenge with diet foods,.. I think
will valuable than spend on the treatment for people who are already ill.
, governments should spend partly on medical treatment. Some diseases like cancer, Ebola
Accept space
AIDS cannot be cured. So Administration should not waste money on these diseases, they just need to spend on somebody who can be cured.
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