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The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, traffic congestion is growing at an alarming rate. For many of us, it is hard to control a plenty of vehicles in the rush hour. Some argue that the best way to cut down
this
 congestion is public
transport
 can be provided free every time. I tend to disagree with
this
 opinion and in
this
 essay, I will support my view with examples. It is certainly the case that free public
transport
 can increase more burden on
government budget
Suggestion
government budgets
the government budget
.
This
 is because countries which apply
this
 idea might be decreased a huge mount source of revenue from public
transport
 fees and private vehicle taxes.
For example
, public
transport
 tickets are totally free leads to the growth of
customer
Suggestion
a customer
the customer
customers
 going by bus, train, underground and so on when these
nation
Suggestion
nations
 lost lots of private
transport
 taxes because there is the dramatic fall in the percentage of private
transport
 owners. A
second
 major reason I do not agree with
this
 suggestion is that free public
transport
 may not satisfy
transport
 demand of citizens.
That is
 to say, the rise of
customer
Suggestion
the customer
 going by public vehicles I highlighted above will bring pressure to public
transport trade
Accept comma addition
transport, trade
 because
government
Suggestion
the government
 may not have enough transports to serve all people or citizens using public vehicles can be overloaded in rush hour. In conclusion, I am certain that providing free public
transport
 have a positive effect on traffic problem in extent. What is more,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should encourage their citizen using public
transport
 by other ways which have less difficult to nation.
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