The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making progress, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making progress, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram shows the steps and tools used during the process of making
cement
, and how concrete for buildings is produced from
this
cement
.
Cement
is made by mixing and processing several
ingredient
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ingredients
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together and the
cement
is
then
mixed with another set of ingredients to make concrete. First,
cement
production beings with limestone and clay being crushed into powder and
then
mixed together in a mixer.
Next
, the mixed powder is heated in a special rotating heater and
then
ground into
cement
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the cement
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before being put into bags. To make concrete from
cement
, the first thing you need to do is combine the
cement
with water, sand, and gravel. The mixture is not equal, with sand and gravel making up
three quarters
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three-quarters
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of the mixture and
cement
and water accounting for the remaining
one quarter
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one-quarter
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.
This
combination is mixed together in a special rotating container called a concrete mixer to produce concrete.
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