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Increasing petrol price is the best way to solve traffic congestion

#petrol #price #traffic #congestion
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Over the
last
 century, our cities faced unprecedented growth of traffic congestion and as
result
Suggestion
a result
 of
this
, we encounter a litany of environmental pollutions. Some experts believe that a rising cost of
petrol
 is the best way to tackle these problems. I firmly believe that there is a defensible basis for
this
 argument. In
this
 essay, some other possible solutions will be elaborated. The proponents of
this
 view claim that recent studies have shown that due to increasing the
price
 of
petrol
, the using of
this
energy
 has dramatically decreased. As
result
Suggestion
a result
 of
this
, the wide demand of
petrol
 has slumped. The key point to justify
this
 attitude could be illustrated by a tangible example. Our country “Iran” has a high reputation for having oil resources.
Consequently
, the
price
 of the
petrol
 was not justified
by comparison
 with another country. To cut a long story short, after applying
this
 idea in cities, the evidence has shown most of the people turn to some Alternatives
instead
 of the use private car.
For example
, by the time went on, the rising
price
 of
petrol
 has caused majority the people use much more public transportation rather than the past. Alternatively, there are other possible solutions to address
this
 issue.
First
 and foremost, the governments should give special care to renewable
energy
such
 as the water, wind, solar
energy
 and etc.
Also
, they should encourage people to use public transportation
such
 as electric tram, metro, bus and etc.
Last
 but not least, we should own up to the fact that we need cultural reconstruction about the true understanding of
energy crisis
Suggestion
the energy crisis
 on our planet. In conclusion, from what has been discussed above, increasing the
price
 of
petrol
 can be an effective factor to reduce consumption of
this
energy
, at least in my country. Serious measures should be taken by government and individuals as a duty for solving these problems.
Also
, the government must assume responsibility, stop passing the bulk and settle down the effective laws for control
this
 issue.
Finally
, it is absolutely imperative we should not try to be wise after the events.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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