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People have different job expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write about the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint

Nowadays, some people believe that changing
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 time to time helps an employee to get more experience and a better
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, while others disagree with
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 opinion and argue that it will destroy their reputation as an employee.
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 viewpoint altering a
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 helps an individual in becoming a successful person.
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 group of advocates reckons that people
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don't stick
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in
 their
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 whole life because they think in
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 at the end. To illustrate
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, a recent study conducted by World Economics Forums results that when a worker works at various places and companies rather doing a single
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, that enhances
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 to understand that people in their work life is easier.
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, I disagree with
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 viewpoint because
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 attitude does not work everywhere. On the other side, who consider doing
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job
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 in
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company
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 is a principal way of generating more positives presents an argument that in
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 way they understand each and every problem of their
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 very nearly,
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, they know how to fix it. From my point of view, they may get higher positions in their
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 as an honour by getting the trust of the
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. In 2014, Cambridge Business School concluded that 90℅ of CEO's of tech tycoon companies
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 as Google hire those persons for their foremost positions who do not have any background altering
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information profiles
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, they got more respect and money in the old age. To conclude, it is not a terminating idea to change a profession or
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,
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 doing it regularly gives many deteriorating effects on
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's resume and
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 get failed to get the honourable position

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