Some people think that the main purpose of school is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued that training children

to become

Suggestion

become

responsible citizens and workers is the purpose of their education and not for individual gains. In my opinion, I concur with

this

fact. Huge sum is invested in education by

government

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the government

every year, and I bet

this

could not have been to raise rapacious citizens that will exploit the economy for their personal benefits. When education is free for children and some of them are even fed in

school

with no charges, it is

government

Suggestion

the government

who pays for them. There is

therefore

no doubt that it is expected that when these children become adults, they will be responsible for national development and growth; they will give back to the society that made them.

For example

, experts have it that about 95% of

tax payers

someone who pays taxes

taxpayers

diligently and faithfully pay their taxes because of

role

Suggestion

the role

of their government in their schooling and upbringing. They believe that being responsible citizens and given back to the country is a way of showing appreciation. Factually, educated people are quite

resoursefull

having inner resources; adroit or imaginative

resourceful

, responsible citizens while

school

drop outs

someone who quits school before graduation

dropouts

are the ones that are involved in dubious activities, defrauding people and exploiting the system for personal

engradizement

This

shows that

school functions

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the school functions

to raise

Suggestion

raise

pupils

a young dog

puppies

to become accountable, with good rectitude. To illustrate, a friend of mine that

quited

to a degree (not used with a negative)

quite

quitted

quieted

schooling has been so acquisitive, and has been living prodigally in

lagos

chief port and economic center of Nigeria; located in southwestern Nigeria on the Gulf of Guinea; former capital of Nigeria

Lagos

. If he went to

school

, he would have been more responsible. To conclude, the purpose of educating pupils is not for their personal acquisition of benefits and gains, but to

develope

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

a responsible work force for the future.

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Some people think that the main purpose of school is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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