Some people think that the main purpose of school is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued that training children

to become

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become

responsible citizens and workers is the purpose of their education and not for individual gains. In my opinion, I concur with

this

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fact. Huge sum is invested in education by

government

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the government

every year, and I bet

this

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could not have been to raise rapacious citizens that will exploit the economy for their personal benefits. When education is free for children and some of them are even fed in

school

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with no charges, it is

government

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the government

who pays for them. There is

therefore

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no doubt that it is expected that when these children become adults, they will be responsible for national development and growth; they will give back to the society that made them.

For example

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, experts have it that about 95% of

tax payers

someone who pays taxes

taxpayers

diligently and faithfully pay their taxes because of

role

Suggestion

the role

of their government in their schooling and upbringing. They believe that being responsible citizens and given back to the country is a way of showing appreciation. Factually, educated people are quite

resoursefull

having inner resources; adroit or imaginative

resourceful

, responsible citizens while

school

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drop outs

someone who quits school before graduation

dropouts

are the ones that are involved in dubious activities, defrauding people and exploiting the system for personal

engradizement

Suggestion

This

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shows that

Use synonyms

school functions

Suggestion

the school functions

to raise

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raise

pupils

a young dog

puppies

to become accountable, with good rectitude. To illustrate, a friend of mine that

quited

to a degree (not used with a negative)

quite

quitted

quieted

schooling has been so acquisitive, and has been living prodigally in

lagos

chief port and economic center of Nigeria; located in southwestern Nigeria on the Gulf of Guinea; former capital of Nigeria

Lagos

. If he went to

school

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, he would have been more responsible. To conclude, the purpose of educating pupils is not for their personal acquisition of benefits and gains, but to

develope

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

a responsible work force for the future.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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270 words

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contribute positively
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creativity
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Some people think that the main purpose of school is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

in many countires nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over tha world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and Clean energy. The benefits of nuclear energy far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transit such as bus, train, or subway. Discuss both these positions and give your own opinion.