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Some people say that it is better for school-leavers to start work immediately. Others say that to be successful, school-leavers should go to university first. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that there is no reason to spend
time
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 studying at the university, and alumni should work
instead
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. Others think that
education
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 is necessary to have more career opportunities, and I strongly believe that people should study after school because a
time
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 invested
to
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in
into
 secondary
education
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 leads to well-paid and high-skilled profession. The main benefit of being employed immediately after school is that people have
first
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-hand experience, and they spend
time
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 building their careers rather than studying. There are plenty of occupations that do not require educational certificates, and it is more reasonable to spend
this
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time
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 gaining skills. Bloggers and social media
infuencers
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enforcers'
 are the example of
such
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 jobs; they do not require completed
education
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, and it is reasonable for them to gain popularity and followers
instead
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 of studying. Unfortunately, most professions require
certain level
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a certain level
 of
education
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 and people cannot grow
profesionally
in a professional manner
professionally
 without it. Not all people can be social media stars;
therefore
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, studying is required for those who are not so lucky to be an
influencer
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
. It is well-known that in some areas career growth is strictly limited without a diploma. Educated professionals usually have
bigger income
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bigger incomes
a bigger income
 than those who are not, and they
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 grow faster. There have been plenty of
situation
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situations
 in Ukrainian companies when ex-students were promoted after a short period of
time
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 only because they had required degree. To conclude, it is necessary to have
educational certificate
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an educational certificate
 in order to have more career opportunities and higher salary. There are some professions that do not require
education
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 at all, but it is rather exception than a rule.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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