Some people say that it is better for school-leavers to start work immediately. Others say that to be successful, school-leavers should go to university first. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that there is no reason to spend
time
studying at the university, and alumni should work
instead
. Others think that
education
is necessary to have more career opportunities, and I strongly believe that people should study after school because a
time
invested
to
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in
into
secondary
education
leads to well-paid and high-skilled profession. The main benefit of being employed immediately after school is that people have
first
-hand experience, and they spend
time
building their careers rather than studying. There are plenty of occupations that do not require educational certificates, and it is more reasonable to spend
this
time
gaining skills. Bloggers and social media
infuencers
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enforcers'
are the example of
such
jobs; they do not require completed
education
, and it is reasonable for them to gain popularity and followers
instead
of studying. Unfortunately, most professions require
certain level
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a certain level
of
education
and people cannot grow
profesionally
in a professional manner
professionally
without it. Not all people can be social media stars;
therefore
, studying is required for those who are not so lucky to be an
influencer
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
. It is well-known that in some areas career growth is strictly limited without a diploma. Educated professionals usually have
bigger income
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bigger incomes
a bigger income
than those who are not, and they
also
grow faster. There have been plenty of
situation
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situations
in Ukrainian companies when ex-students were promoted after a short period of
time
only because they had required degree. To conclude, it is necessary to have
educational certificate
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an educational certificate
in order to have more career opportunities and higher salary. There are some professions that do not require
education
at all, but it is rather exception than a rule.
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