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Everyone one have to learn English. Do you agree. Is it important to protect local languages and if yes how.

#english #languages
English is now being used by many countries and has been introduced as a lesson in many schools. Owing to
this
,
i
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I
 think it is crucial for every school child to learn
this
 language.
Nevertheless
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 feel our local languages have to be protected so that they are not suppressed by English language. Personally,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 feel the importance of English as a language is increasing drastically,
hence
 every child has to be given the opportunity to learn it. My argument is based on the fact that, the world has taken a new twist and use of technology is now more prominent than ever before. New gadgets like smart phones and computers has been invented because of
tevhnology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
.
Today almost
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Today, almost
 everyone owns either a phone or a computer if not both. In most
cases these
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cases, these
 gadgets are being used to surf data on the internet or to communicate with friends through social media
such
 as
facebook
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Facebook
 or
whatsapp
 just to mention a few. To be able to use either internet or social media a command in English is essential Due to that it will be beneficial for everyone to be able
to to
in the direction of
to
 communicate in English. In conclusion, my own feeling is it a worthwhile action for English to be learnt by all of us even though
this
 must not cause the extinction of our mother languages.
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