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Families who do not send their children to public schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It has been argued that people who sponsor their children in private schools, should be exempted from taxation meant to
support
 public schools and universal basic
education
.
I
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In
 my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
 view. Families whose children do not attend public
school
 must continue to pay
tax
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taxes
.
This
 is necessary to
support
 government in catering for the less privileged and poorer families as we live in and operate a socialist economy. While
this
 ensures fairness and equity, it
also
 makes the society safe and secure for all.
For example
, if the poor was denied
education
 because the rich did not
support
 public
school
 through tax because he was not subscribing to them, the sons of the poor who could not afford
education
 could turn to hooligans and terrorise the communities.
Furthermore
, taxes should be paid by all citizens to
support
 public
school
 because it is more cost effective. In fact, it is clear that if the public schools are functioning optimally, everybody will want to attend
them including
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them, including
 the rich because it is cheaper with more qualified teachers and other manpower.
Conversely private
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Conversely, private
 schools are unnecessarily costly, employing cheap unqualified
labour
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labours
 and extorting the communities. Public
school
 needs just
little more
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a little more support
support
 from sources,
such
 as taxes to give its best for everyone.
For instance
, public schools are fully funded through taxation in Ghana, and they have high standard
such
 that private schools do not thrive there at all. To conclude, no tax exemption or concession
on
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for
 those whose children are not in public
school
 in order to ensure basic
education
 for all, standardize our government
school
 and make a secure society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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