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In most developed countries shopping is not only about buying the goods you need, it is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples based on your experience

#countries #goods #entertainment #development
In economically developing nations, way of delights is window shopping
instead
 of buying something from
stores
Suggestion
the stores
. I believe that people go out for shopping as well as an outing.
To begin
 with, nowadays in developing countries shopping malls are the place of entertainment for the kids as well as for elders.
Although
 shopkeeper created different kind of concerts, music program, stalls for enhancing the interest of people, in the shopping malls, there is the facility of food club.
Furthermore
, nowadays, cities are congested because of overpopulation, buildings, malls and industry replace the playing grounds. So, it's a positive thing that people can release their stress in
this
 way. To conclude
this
, shopping malls are a point for a free spot which has a good impact on both buyers and sellers.
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