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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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Immigrant issue has become
major problem
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a major problem
 in many countries. The discussion on what cause immigration continuously occurs and what effects
this
 issue has posed to society still unsettled.
This
 essay will be elaborated on the main reasons and consequences of immigration. One of the most possible theories that explains why people need to flee from their homelands is a desire to have a better
life
. Better quality of
life
 can be divided into many aspects, but the most mentioned explanations are greater
life
 opportunities and personal safety. For those who are facing dead ends in expanding
life
 possibilities, leaving the
country
 seems to be a fresh start for them.
For instance
, many retired European fly to spend the rest of their lives in Asian countries, where the living cost is much cheaper than their origins.
Furthermore
, many countries have been facing wars, financial crisis, or natural disaster. These hardships leave people with no choices but to leave their place of birth to find a place that can give them peace and safety. Undeniably, destination countries are those who directly affected by
this
 event. Issues,
such
 as language barrier and cultural differences, may arise due to the immigrants coming from completely different backgrounds.
Moreover
, having more people to take care means that destination countries have to spend more money to facilitate them. Because of that, they will have less money to develop other parts of
country
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the country
. To conclude, an urge for seeking happiness and stability in
life
 is the root cause of immigration.
Consequently
, the nations that
are open for immigrants
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then open for immigrants need
are open for immigrants then need
then
 need to spend more resources in order to take care of them properly. Under these circumstances, each
country
 should be aware of their readiness before hands any
supports
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support
 to the immigrants. Meanwhile, the immigrants should
also
 prepare themselves enough to adapt
with
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to
 the new
country
, before leaving their homelands.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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