People living in the twenty-first century have better standards of living than people who lived in the past. To what extent [completely/ absolutely --- partly/ somehow] agree or disagree?

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am partly agree

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partly agree

with the opinion that

peoples

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the peoples

of the 21st century are living with higher standards compares to those who lived in previous times. We cannot look only into the bright side with various improvements and skip issues that arise recently in our modern

world

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. On the one hand, it can be denied that owing to numerous technological developments and medical breakthroughs, our

world

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in the 21st century is far more convenient than it used to be in our

ancestors

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ancestors'

time.

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, the invention of robots and internet have pushed the standards of living to a greatly higher level. In fact, It is obvious that robots are playing an increasingly important role in our lives. They are used in factories for the ability to work continuously with accuracy. They

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support people to do heavy, dangerous jobs

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as constructing, mining

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etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

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, people have

changes

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changed

to live a longer, healthier life thanks to medical breakthroughs. Sciences

has found

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have found

out many vaccines and cures for numerous illnesses. Taking malaria as an example.

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million lives had been taken because of malaria in the

past but

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past, but

now we don’t have to worry about

this

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disease as our parents did.

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, in some parts of the

world

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, several peoples are still suffering from wars, poverty, environmental and social problems. In most of the metropolis cities,

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vast

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the vast

a vast

growing in the population, peoples

are facing

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are faced

will be faced

with many issues related to traffic, air pollution, accommodation, unemployment, etc.

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, it is a fact that in

third

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world

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countries, where civil wars, crimes and poverty are common, basic needs

such

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as peace, food and home seem to be luxury stuffs.

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, those unlucky peoples do not reach

the the

definite article

the

advantages of the century. In conclusion,

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improvements and inventions

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which benefit our

life

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lives

and solve various problems of the past, have been made in plenty aspects of the

world

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, humanity nowadays still have to figure out solutions for many other issues in order to ensure

the higher

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the highest

the high

standard of living for people all around the

world

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

347 words

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People living in the twenty-first century have better standards of living than people who lived in the past. To what extent [completely/ absolutely --- partly/ somehow] agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems might these differences cause? How might these problems be reduced?

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.