People living in the twenty-first century have better standards of living than people who lived in the past. To what extent [completely/ absolutely --- partly/ somehow] agree or disagree?

I
am partly agree
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partly agree
with the opinion that
peoples
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the peoples
of the 21st century are living with higher standards compares to those who lived in previous times. We cannot look only into the bright side with various improvements and skip issues that arise recently in our modern
world
. On the one hand, it can be denied that owing to numerous technological developments and medical breakthroughs, our
world
in the 21st century is far more convenient than it used to be in our
ancestors
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ancestors'
time.
First
, the invention of robots and internet have pushed the standards of living to a greatly higher level. In fact, It is obvious that robots are playing an increasingly important role in our lives. They are used in factories for the ability to work continuously with accuracy. They
also
support people to do heavy, dangerous jobs
such
as constructing, mining
,
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,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
.
Second
, people have
changes
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changed
to live a longer, healthier life thanks to medical breakthroughs. Sciences
has found
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have found
out many vaccines and cures for numerous illnesses. Taking malaria as an example.
Although
million lives had been taken because of malaria in the
past but
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past, but
now we don’t have to worry about
this
disease as our parents did.
On the other hand
, in some parts of the
world
, several peoples are still suffering from wars, poverty, environmental and social problems. In most of the metropolis cities,
as a result
of
vast
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the vast
a vast
growing in the population, peoples
are facing
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are faced
will be faced
with many issues related to traffic, air pollution, accommodation, unemployment, etc.
Moreover
, it is a fact that in
third
-
world
countries, where civil wars, crimes and poverty are common, basic needs
such
as peace, food and home seem to be luxury stuffs.
Therefore
, those unlucky peoples do not reach
the the
definite article
the
advantages of the century. In conclusion,
although
improvements and inventions
,
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,
which benefit our
life
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lives
and solve various problems of the past, have been made in plenty aspects of the
world
, humanity nowadays still have to figure out solutions for many other issues in order to ensure
the higher
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the highest
the high
standard of living for people all around the
world
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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