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You arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Explain the important -Apologize for the situation -Suggest a new arrangement

#visit #friend #england #event #home #change #dates #-explain #-apologize #situation #-suggest #arrangement
Dear
john
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John
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, I hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and
to
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in
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 the best of spirits. I know you must be very excited about my
visit
 to your place but
unfortunately
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 I have to postpone my plan due to some other important commitments.
This
 morning, I received a letter from my NRI brother Harry that mentions that he is coming to
visit
 home at the same
time
 we planned to meet. As we had not seen him
from
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for
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long
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a long
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time
 since his studies in
USA
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the USA
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, we all are very excited to meet him and spend some quality
time
 together.
Also
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 we had to
visit
 some of our relatives and take a tour
to
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of
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 nearby attractions and temples, so I would be really busy during those days. I really apologize for rescheduling my
visit
 to your place because Harry had even booked the tickets and taken leaves from his office
otherwise
 he could have changed his
visit
 plan to India. He
do
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does
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 not
visit
 us very often so it is
really
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 special family get together
event
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an event
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 that I cannot afford to miss. By the way, my business would be
little
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a little
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 slow in coming summers, I could make a
visit
 to you at that
time
,
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 if it is convenient to you. I will have even more
time
 to
spent
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 with you and cover the attractions. Once again I am sorry from the bottom of my heart for the inconvenience caused. Hope you understand my situation. see you soon. Warm Regards Daniel
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