A persons worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.

Some people argue that these
day’s
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days
days’
people can only be judged with their social status and possession of wealth they have.
On the other hand
, kindness, and truthfulness
are not remain
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are not remaining
do not remain
don't remain
are not remained
have not remained
valuable
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values
value
in a person. I disagree with
this
statement and I will give reasons for
this
in the forthcoming paragraphs. It is undoubtedly true that people these days are getting respected and valued, owing to the money and status they possess.
However
, it does not
mean if
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mean, if
a person is wealthy and not honest, and kind
to
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of
people will get respected all the time.
This
is because people who have wealth but do not share
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
percentage of it to the poor people of society will never get admiration and will be called selfish.
For example
, Bill Gates, the world richest person, participates in charitable activities have the popularity owing to the generosity possess by him to the poor people.
Furthermore
, many companies judge their employees by their honesty and hard work.
This
is because an employee is valuable for a company provided he or she is committed and honest
to
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in
the work.
For instance
, the organization where I am working, have many poor
employees but
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employees, but
are more valuable to their boss and senior management owing to their true spirit and honesty to boost the company’s business. To sum up, sometime people will be valued for the money they have. I am not in the agreement with
this
notion as I believe, qualities like generosity and honesty are more critical to value someone.
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