Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Globalization, industrialization and evolution in technology has led to
exponential increase
an exponential increase
exponential increases
the exponential increase
in competition between individuals, corporations and countries. Each country aims to be the best in varied areas like economic development, trade, bilateral relations and so on. International sporting
events provide
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events, provide
countries a unique platform to display their supremacy in various indoor and outdoor games. A school of thought believes that spending taxpayer’s money in training
to win medals in competitions, should
be diverted to improvement in infrastructure and public welfare schemes. I do not agree with
opinion. It is extremely difficult to be the best in areas like economic development, trade, etc.
is because countries are connected to each other closely
as a result
of globalization. Any negative event in one part of the world has an immediate cascading effect in another country. In times of recession,
becomes worse. Take the example of the global recession of 2008. United
States including
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States, including
countries across the world, whether it was Singapore (
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decrease in exports) or Asian countries like India, Vietnam (
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in software exports), etc.
the brunt of
event. Let’s look at the recent example of a major fire breakout in China’s major shipping port.
destroyed several corporations’ goods, including those belonging to Jaguar Land Rover. Since, it is headquartered in the UK; the impact of the catastrophe was felt there in a big way. As stated earlier,
international sports competition
an international sports competition
like the Olympics, Commonwealth Games, etc.
an arena where countries can display their might in physical fitness, agility. These events act like a glue; they bring all citizens of a country together in terms of patriotism. When
win, they bring fame to both themselves and to their respective countries. The recent example of the Cricket World Cup in 2011 was won by the Indian cricket team and led by Mahendra Singh Dhoni stupendously. Not only
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, but
the entire
team including
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team, including
its support staff and India received
tremendous name
a tremendous name
and fame. Based on the above facts, I believe that a government spending public money in training
for international sporting competitions is the right step indeed.
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