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The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.

The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.
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The line graph illustrates information about the changing share
price
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 of Outokumpu companies in euros over a period of nearly five years starting from June 2006 until Dec 2010. First of all, of all, the
price
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has
Unnecessary verb
apply
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reached
the
Correct article usage
a
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 peak
in
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at
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 around the end of 2006. It was nearly Eur 33. There was a fluctuation during the
year
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 2007. At the start of the
year
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 2008, the
price
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has
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased steadily to reach 30 Eur after that the
price
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has
Unnecessary verb
apply
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dropped dramatically to reach the lowest point
less
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of less
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 than 10 Eur
at the end
Linking Words
 of 2008. There was a
a
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apply
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slight
recovering
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recovery
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 in 2009. In 2010, the
price
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 remained
fluctuating
Wrong verb form
fluctuated
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 with a gradual rise in the middle of the
year
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 followed by a steady decline
at the end
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 of the
year
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. In conclusion, there was a fluctuation and a decrease almost in the share
price
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 of Outokumpu companies in euros almost every
year
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,
its
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it
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 only significantly rose twice during the whole five years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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