The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.

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of Outokumpu companies in euros over a period of nearly five years starting from June 2006 until Dec 2010. First of all, of all, the

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around the end of 2006. It was nearly Eur 33. There was a fluctuation during the

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2007. At the start of the

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2008, the

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increased steadily to reach 30 Eur after that the

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dropped dramatically to reach the lowest point

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than 10 Eur

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of 2008. There was a

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in 2009. In 2010, the

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with a gradual rise in the middle of the

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followed by a steady decline

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. In conclusion, there was a fluctuation and a decrease almost in the share

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of Outokumpu companies in euros almost every

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only significantly rose twice during the whole five years.