Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacations, while others believe they should get one long vacation. Give the advantages of both and express your own point of view.

Vacations are the most awaited and enjoyable period of
school
life. These days students plan well in advance the activities, they are going to do during vacations.
some
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Some
people think that there should be many short-term vacations, while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
thinks that there should be only
one
long-term vacation and I agree with the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
group of people.
To begin
with,
one
long vacation means, there are not multiple breaks from
school
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school, thus
thus
no distraction from studies more than once.
Moreover I
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Moreover, I
believe that long vacations could be spent more appropriately
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
short vacations. In long vacations, students could join a skill development programs
such
as swimming or learning foreign language, which is not possible in short-duration vacations.
For example
, I joined
advanced mathematics course
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an advanced mathematics course
the advanced mathematics course
during my long holidays that
further
helped me to score good marks in my
school
exams.
However
, there are some advantages of short-duration vacations. The main advantage of
such
holiday
pattern is less gap in studies as compared to long holidays.
Also
the students are aware that their
school
will start soon, they are well prepared and spent their
vacations
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vacation
in a balanced
way unlike
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way, unlike
long vacations, when students forget to do studies considering the long days
for
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of
school
restart. In my opinion,
one
long
holiday
is beneficial for all of us, whether students, parents, teachers or
school
.
one
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One
long
holiday
means more family
time
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time, thus
thus
many days to
spent
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spend
quality time together.
Furthermore
,
one
holiday
during a session means only
one
time distraction or gap from
school
studies unlike multiple small holidays. To sum up, holidays are meant for refreshments and in my opinion long holidays give us better opportunities to
spent
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spend
them decently either with families or learning
new skill
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new skills
a new skill
in comparison to short vacations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistently
  • frequent intervals
  • preventing burnout
  • information retention
  • consolidate knowledge
  • short getaways
  • strengthening family bonds
  • comprehensive rest
  • unwind
  • mental and emotional recharging
  • structured planning
  • extensive trips
  • academic projects
  • internships
  • continuity
  • in-depth understanding
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