Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacations, while others believe they should get one long vacation. Give the advantages of both and express your own point of view.

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Vacations are the most awaited and enjoyable period of

school

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life. These days students plan well in advance the activities, they are going to do during vacations.

some

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Some

people think that there should be many short-term vacations, while

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

thinks that there should be only

one

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long-term vacation and I agree with the

later

referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)

latter

group of people.

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with,

one

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long vacation means, there are not multiple breaks from

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school

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school, thus

thus

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no distraction from studies more than once.

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Moreover I

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Moreover, I

believe that long vacations could be spent more appropriately

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then

conjunction used in comparatives

than

short vacations. In long vacations, students could join a skill development programs

such

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as swimming or learning foreign language, which is not possible in short-duration vacations.

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, I joined

advanced mathematics course

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an advanced mathematics course

the advanced mathematics course

during my long holidays that

further

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helped me to score good marks in my

school

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exams.

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, there are some advantages of short-duration vacations. The main advantage of

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holiday

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pattern is less gap in studies as compared to long holidays.

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the students are aware that their

school

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will start soon, they are well prepared and spent their

vacations

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vacation

in a balanced

way unlike

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way, unlike

long vacations, when students forget to do studies considering the long days

for

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school

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restart. In my opinion,

one

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long

holiday

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is beneficial for all of us, whether students, parents, teachers or

school

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one

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One

long

holiday

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means more family

time

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time, thus

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many days to

spent

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spend

quality time together.

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one

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holiday

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during a session means only

one

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time distraction or gap from

school

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studies unlike multiple small holidays. To sum up, holidays are meant for refreshments and in my opinion long holidays give us better opportunities to

spent

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spend

them decently either with families or learning

new skill

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new skills

a new skill

in comparison to short vacations.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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291 words

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Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacations, while others believe they should get one long vacation. Give the advantages of both and express your own point of view.

Fully explain your ideas

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