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Globalization has brought about more positive economic impacts than negative ones. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Over the
last
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 century,
globalization
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 has united many nations and countries, economically, culturally, politically and socially. While the
globalists
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 see the need for the global integration as a cure to the economic prosperity of the
world
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 and,
consequently
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, its abiding
development
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, others comprehend the concept of ‘global village’ as a menace to the
world
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economy
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. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.
First
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 and foremost,
globalization
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 eases economic interaction between different countries and creates a conducive environment for the retrenchment of resources and stimulation of global progress. One of the examples is the SWIFT network, which enables financial institutions worldwide to exchange information on financial transactions in a fraction of a
second
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 in a unified, secure and reliable environment.
Today more
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Today, more
 than 11,000 financial institutions in more than 200 countries are linked to the SWIFT network, and they exchange an average of over 15 million messages every day. What is more,
globalization
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, enhancing competition, stimulates
further
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development
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 of new technologies and its dissemination globally.
On the other hand
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, the
globalization
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 phenomenon, despite its positive aspects, has
also
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 negative repercussion on the
economy
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, particularly on the stability of the economies of developing countries.
Globalization
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 exacerbates the inequity and instability of both national and
world
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 economic
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development
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developments
.
This
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, in turn, leads to the heightened tensions in the
world
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, which increases investment and entrepreneurial risks and hinders the
development
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 of the
world
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economy
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. The processes of
globalization
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, for the most part,
aggravates
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aggravate
 the technological gap between the developed and developing economies. In the context of
globalization
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, the growth rate of the direct investment far exceeds that of the
world
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economy
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, which is a key factor in transnational companies establishing, which,
consequently
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, has a great direct impact on the national economies. Since the process of
globalization
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 in the modern
world
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 is a trend of its
development
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, fighting the consequences of it and stimulating
further
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 positive
development
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 factors are the matters of global concern.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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