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Should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with the statement.

#force #children #language
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Schools are
good source
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a good source
 of learning varied languages. Based on the difficulties and stress
educatees
give an education to
educates
 undergo in learning foreign languages
,
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,
many opine that school should restrict teaching other languages to children.
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, I completely disagree with
this
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 belief and will justify my opinion in
ensuing paragraphs
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the ensuing paragraphs
.
To begin
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 with, being multilingual enhances children's future education and career perspectives by
openning
first or beginning
opening
 the door of other Nations for them; offering better education and employment opportunities. Germany,
for
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instance offers
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instance, offers
 free
education
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educational
 facilities to young aspirants, possessing certified learning skills in German
language
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.
Moreover
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, attaining a good job is
ultimate purpose
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the ultimate purpose
 of every child and many international companies prefers speakers of multiple
language
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 over monolinguals as employees.
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, learning foreign languages gives ample of benefits to learners, latest ages.
In addition
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 to
this
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, children who
speaks
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speak
 more than one
language
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 develops better learning skills. An experiment was conducted by
child development unit
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the child development unit
 at Cambridge University over two groups of students,
comparining
the act of examining resemblances
comparing
 learning abilities of monolingual's and multiple
language
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 speakers. The result of experiment affirms that
multilinguals
using or knowing more than one language
multilingual
 possess better learning and their retaining capacity is
also
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 high.
Hence
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, school teaching more than one
language
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are certainly creating
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is certainly creating
 better
clain
group of people related by blood or marriage
clan
claim
slaying
 of children possessing high-level psychological traits. To conclude, it is evident that learning more languages at early stages of life might be a difficult process,
however
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,
this
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 process shows better results in later and peculiar stages of life.
Thus
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,
school
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schools
the school
 should make students
to learn
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learn
 languages other than their mother tongue.
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