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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that is good for country, while other believe that government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In some parts of the world, salaries of few employees are very high. Some people consider it is a positive sign. While, another set of people believe that
government
 should impose
cap
Suggestion
a cap
 on salaries and limit employee’s earnings. In my opinion, I believe there should not be limited
for
Suggestion
to
 earnings, people get paid as per their skills set and talent, directly or indirectly it
motive
Suggestion
motivated
motivate
motivates
motivating
 individuals to work hard and serve society. On the one hand, individuals who are highly talented with unique skills are very rare. They can contribute much more to their employer as well as to the country. So they must be rewarded with high salaries to motivate them to do more. One more thing, they are the job creators. With their unique skills and passion towards work get more projects for the employers. Which will indirectly help’s the society.
On the other hand
, some people think it is better for
government
 to control salaries and limit employees earnings,
Government
 budgets will get increased.
This
 amount can be used for the development of the country. At the same time, there would be equality among people.
Government
 can spend more money on basic health care, education and housing, which are very basics for human. To conclude, I believe there should not be any cap for salaries, which will eventually discourage people to work more and contribute to the society. By imposing limits on citizen’s earning will give a huge budget for
government
 to develop
nation
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the nation
. But, unfortunately every
government
 is not honest
to
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with
 their people.
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