People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

Despite the
megacities
that has
hundrds
being ten more than ninety
hundreds
hundred
of millions of people living in,
such
as Beijing and New York, urban cities as a whole has defects that are giving people a hard time to live in. Problems like traffic jam, or air pollutions are hard to ignore. On the other hard, government
definetely
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
should play a role
on
Suggestion
in
encouraging
adjecent
nearest in space or position; immediately adjoining without intervening space
adjacent
inhabiting
life-styles
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyles
. There are just too many
car
Suggestion
cars
running on the road that slows down the traffics in the cities everyday. On average, American
housholds
a social unit living together
households
occupy 2.5 cars, which explains why 9:00 every morning in New York city, there is always somewhere that’s traffic jammed. More
also
, people often got late for work simply they were stuck on their roads to work. Another problem for people who lives in large cities is the air conditions. As we already knew, large
infustructures
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructures
are needed in order to supplement large cities, there will be energy
power house
a highly energetic and indefatigable person
powerhouse
, water processing factories, and waste elimination factories. Those factories will have to use certain
machanical
using (or as if using) mechanisms or tools or devices
mechanical
mechnisim
a light silver-white ductile bivalent metallic element; in pure form it burns with brilliant white flame; occurs naturally only in combination (as in magnesite and dolomite and carnallite and spinel and olivine)
magnesium
that will
eventally
after an unspecified period of time or an especially long delay
eventually
produce emissions that could be harmful to people, and for those who lives in the large city will get caught in their daily life. As the government, they should create incentive policies that
makes
Suggestion
make
living outside of urban city more
appealling
able to attract interest or draw favorable attention
appealing
to citizens.
For example
, the government can offer
benefical program
Suggestion
a beneficial program
beneficial program
that helps people who wants to buy houses in regional towns.
Thus
, people will find the new
living life-style
Accept comma addition
living, lifestyle
living lifestyle
living lifestyles
more
appealling
able to attract interest or draw favorable attention
appealing
to them. In conclusion, those citizens who
lives
Suggestion
live
in large
cites
a large and densely populated urban area; may include several independent administrative districts
cities
have problems with traffic jam and air pollution that trouble their daily life.
However
, governments should have well designed policies, or programs that
helps
Suggestion
help
people to make the decision of living in
adjecent
nearest in space or position; immediately adjoining without intervening space
adjacent
region more easy to choose.
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