allowing children to make there own decision on everyday matter (Food/clothes/entertainment) is likely to result in society of individuals who only think about their own self. other people believe that it is important for children to make their own decision about matters that affect them. discuss and give your opinion ad give relevant examples.

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upbringing

Suggestion

Upbringing

of the children is an important part of every society and it is believed by some individuals that letting children take

decision

for their daily activities like choice of clothes, foods and entertainment lead them to self

centered

being or placed in the center

centred

and affect the society as a whole but

on the other hand

some people are of the opposite view, they think it will be good for them.

This

essay will discuss both the views,

firstly

it will focus on the adverse effect of

decision

making by children and

secondaly it

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secondly, it

secondly it

will discuss the

benifit

financial assistance in time of need

benefit

and essentials of letting children make their own choice for daily matters.

Decision

making is an important part

appropriate to; intended for

for

every

individual but

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individual, but

along with it comes the consequences, if children are allowed to make choices for their daily matters like clothes, food and entertainment it will has its own repercussion as children are not mature enough to take wise

decision

and are tend to make mistakes which will have adverse effect

for

example in

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example, in

Suggestion

survay

consider in a comprehensive way

survey

conducted by one of the leading food

magzine

a periodic publication containing pictures and stories and articles of interest to those who purchase it or subscribe to it

magazine

magazines

it was seen that 58% of children who had less parental restriction were indulged in more junk food eating habit and more prone to obesity and other health risk.

Suggestion

is seen that when there is no parental guidance children are inclined toward

entertainment programme

Suggestion

an entertainment programme

which have violet and unethical contents and

this

lead them to have aggressive behaviour and become self

centered

being or placed in the center

centred

. But

on the other

hand on

Suggestion

hand, at

hand at

hand with

the broader view it is seen that if children are allowed to take

decision

for small day to day

activities it

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activities, it

will help them become confident

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independent and responsible in

long run

Suggestion

the long run

, as the onus of every

decision

taken will be on them so they will learn from

there

of them or themselves

their

own mistakes which will help them become responsible

citizen

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citizen, for

for example

- in

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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416 words

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