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SOME PEOPLE PREFER TO PROVIDE HELP AND SUPPORT DIRECTLY TO THOSE IN NEED.OTHERS HOWEVER PREFER TO GIVE MONEY TO NATIONAL AND INTERNATIONAL CHARITABLE ORGANIZATIONS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION

While some individuals choose to give help and support personally to the needy
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others would rather offer
money
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 to local and foreign charitable organizations.
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giving
money
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 in person to those in need ensures accountability
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charitable organizations guarantee fair and equitable distribution of funds for needy people.In my opinion
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this
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 is the best method of rendering help. One the one hand
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offering help directly ensures that these funds are actually used for the needy.
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 is because it prevents incidences of corruption and misappropriation of funds by eliminating the “middleman”
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in the past three months
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two directors of non governmental organizations have been probed by the economic and financial crimes commission because it was while people donate large sums of
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 towards helping the poor
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these men line their pockets with these funds
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giving only a minor fraction to the less privileged.
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 think that giving monies to charitable organizations is a better way of rendering help because it eliminates bias and ensures fairness in the distribution of resources.
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people may decide to
give
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give money only to
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 to only those who share
same religious beliefs
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the same religious beliefs
 as they do or to only those
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of
 a particular ethnic group.
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many donors may end up providing support
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for
 the same
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individual, therefore
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while one person receives these benefits
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other less privileged individuals are neglected. In conclus
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on,while peoples opinion may va
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 on the choice of whether to offer help and support in person or through national and international charitable organizati
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ns,I strongly believe that the latter is better as resources can be fairly distributed amongst underprivileged people

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