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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. Do the advantages of this new approach outweigh the disadvantages?

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As we move into the
twenty - first
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 century,
technology
 is affecting many different areas of life and
education
 is no exception. Indeed, in some
institutions
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 traditional forms of
education
 have been revolutionised by new
technology
 to the extent that the lecture is no longer the main method of delivery.
While
 there are a variety of benefits to
this
 new approach, there are
also
 significant drawbacks. Perhaps the greatest bonus of the introduction of
technology
 is the flexibility it offers.
This
 is evident in two different ways.
Firstly
, it is
now
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no longer essential for students to be present in the lecture theatre for their
courses
.
This
 means that
part - time
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courses
 for adults who are in employment and distance learning
courses
 for people in other countries are now much more practical. Another area of flexibility is of course that the lecturer and tutor are able to use Moodles, interactive whiteboards and other tools to deliver their
courses
 in a more stimulating way to large numbers of students. Not everything,
however
, about the introduction of
this
 new
technology
 into
education
 is positive. One major problem is that not all students are comfortable with using
technology
, even if they are part of the digital native generation.
This
 is a serious issue as they may suffer from their lack of technological skills. Another related issue is that
education
 is a human activity and it works best with as much human interaction as possible. Impersonal
technology
 cannot replace the human contact found in traditional
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 tutorials and seminars. As we have seen, there are major benefits to the introduction of
technology
 into
education
, not least because it enables modern forms of
education
such
 as distance learning
courses
.
This
 is balanced,
however
, by the fact that it can be too impersonal for some and
disadvantages
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 others for their lack of technological skills.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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