It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older than that of young people in many countries in the future? Do you think it is a positive and negative development?

In the recent days, it becomes apparent that the quantity of the elderly
people which
Accept comma addition
people, which
experiences an upward trend is more than the number of
the younger
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the youngest
in many countries from
then
onwards. While there are clear positive aspects of
this
trend, it
also
causes positive growth in having less the youthful people. On the one hand, one main advantage of
this
issue is that senior citizens can have a significant impact on
countries’ economy
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the countries’ economy
.
First
and foremost, they rely on a pension and cannot enough power energy to make money.
As a result
, it is true that government
have
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has
to pay extra-money to nurture them rather than boosting either
education
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educational
or entertainment services, which vividly loses budget of that country. Public insurance companies in Japan country,
for example
, giving more and more various discounts for bills
such
as electricity, water and health protection are likely to waste a lot of
cashes
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cash
.
On the other hand
, the adolescent people can indeed gain more knowledge and take a great advice from
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
individuals.
Firstly
, old people who witness ups and downs of the history can reveal the former events
more comprehensively
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more comprehensive
than others.
Besides
, they can help their families to do housework
such
as cooking or looking for their own grandchildren
instead
of sending to child care
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
whenever the younger members are busy outside. Having considered both views, I do believe that
the big
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the biggest
amount of the senior people is of overriding importance, contributing hugely to the both drawbacks and
merits
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merit
development in each country. In my opinion,
government
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the government
should control
this
aging rate to create an effective system in the future.

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