It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older than that of young people in many countries in the future? Do you think it is a positive and negative development?

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In the recent days, it becomes apparent that the quantity of the elderly

people which

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people, which

experiences an upward trend is more than the number of

the younger

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the youngest

in many countries from

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onwards. While there are clear positive aspects of

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trend, it

also

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causes positive growth in having less the youthful people. On the one hand, one main advantage of

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issue is that senior citizens can have a significant impact on

countries’ economy

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the countries’ economy

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and foremost, they rely on a pension and cannot enough power energy to make money.

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, it is true that government

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has

to pay extra-money to nurture them rather than boosting either

education

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educational

or entertainment services, which vividly loses budget of that country. Public insurance companies in Japan country,

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, giving more and more various discounts for bills

such

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as electricity, water and health protection are likely to waste a lot of

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cash

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, the adolescent people can indeed gain more knowledge and take a great advice from

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advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

older

individuals.

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, old people who witness ups and downs of the history can reveal the former events

more comprehensively

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more comprehensive

than others.

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, they can help their families to do housework

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as cooking or looking for their own grandchildren

instead

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of sending to child care

center

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centre

whenever the younger members are busy outside. Having considered both views, I do believe that

the big

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the biggest

amount of the senior people is of overriding importance, contributing hugely to the both drawbacks and

merits

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merit

development in each country. In my opinion,

government

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the government

should control

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aging rate to create an effective system in the future.

Fri May 31 2019

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older than that of young people in many countries in the future? Do you think it is a positive and negative development?

Your opinion

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