People who go to live in other countries should follow the customs and tradition of the new country, to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Considering the persistence lament it
can not
can not
cannot
be overlooked the number of persons, who migrate to the foreign land due to the elevation in life standards as well
upliftment
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in career opportunities.
That is
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why,
an
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a
question arises on a global scale regarding the rituals
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rather the
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rather, the
same have been adopted or not. As far as my views are
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concerned
, I agree to a large extent to the mentioned view. My thoughts will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
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with, I must say that nation's
virtues
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virtue
and traditions are giving more friendly atmosphere and freedom
to
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of
the individual.
This
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is because, If a
migrator
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Migrator
moderator
would familiar with the language and dressing sense the same will definitely take a sole to higher emotional
intelligency
the ability to comprehend; to understand and profit from experience
intelligence
.
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, an article
of
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by
New York Times once had published that almost 30% of the
migrators
habitually moving from place to place especially in search of seasonal work
migrants
are adopting traditions before
bording
the act of passengers and crew getting aboard a ship or aircraft
boarding
budding
birding
to the
foreigh
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
land.
On the other hand
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, a loud
voiceness
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volcano
volcanoes
supports that though having numerous pros, it is irrefutable that due to the
formar
the organization of information according to preset specifications (usually for computer processing)
format
discussed cause mother country's
ritues
an established ceremony prescribed by a religion
rites
rituals
rights
are on the verge of
extinct
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extinction
.
Furthermore
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, sometimes the same
scenaris
an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
scenarios
scenario
has led
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have led
individual to a
dilemna
state of uncertainty or perplexity especially as requiring a choice between equally unfavorable options
dilemma
. To support the prior sentence, an impending threat observed when Saudi
Arebia
a peninsula between the Red Sea and the Persian Gulf; strategically important for its oil resources
Arabia
deport a family because lady refused to wear "Burkha."So,
raputation
the state of being held in high esteem and honor
reputation
of the country was restrained. In the final analysis, it can be seen that,
although
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, there are
few downsides
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a few downsides
of cultivating rituals
such
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as diminishing of local culture, my reasoning is that it remarkably improves
living standard
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living standards
the living standard
and freedom which infers that adopting nature is inevitable, which certainly bridge up the differences and offer more time to be one
responsable
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
citizen.
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