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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions . Do you agree or disagree ?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
In recent days, collecting information has become more
convienient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 thanks to the proliferation of technology.
Although
this
 method is practical in many aspects, preserving public libraries should be paid much more attention. On the one hand, there are a number of benefits of finding information by using the Internet.
Firstly
,
this
 method is really convenient as search engine allows us to search any material online quickly only with a click of
mouse
Suggestion
a mouse
 or even a screen touch of smart phones, at anytime and anywhere. Before the appearance of the Internet, people are required to travel physically to libraries to find
such
 materials, which costs unnecessary time and effort.
Secondly
, the Internet provides us a huge amount of data from different sources so people can choose suitable material for their projects or assignments. It is obvious that these online materials are easier to study rather than collecting several books in a library.
On the other hand
, public libraries still have more advantages than the Internet. One benefit is that libraries can create a professional studying place with sufficient facilities and quiet atmosphere, which are beneficial to students as they can concentrate on their academic purposes.
Additionally
, individuals have
chance
Suggestion
the chance
a chance
 to make friends and exchange learning experience while studying
in
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at
this
 place.
Furthermore
, the library plays an important role in providing reliable learning resource. In fact, the materials have been strictly verified by authorities before being published, while it is impossible to
do
engage in
make
 the same progress for all of the information on the Internet.
That is
 why books in libraries are more reliable than online documents. In conclusion,
although
 the development of computer science has brought lots of benefits to our lives, I believe that not all functions of a public library can be performed by it.
Therefore
, maintaining public libraries still worth receiving national budget.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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